Winnie_ther_pu wrote:I appreciate the feedback, but I would appreciate the comments more were it apparent that you had read the entire article.
You are welcome.
I did read your entire article, unless I am missing something. I did not see clarifications re my suggestions.
Since you asked for suggestions (though you did not clarify where you wanted suggestions), I offered them here. Simple as that. I figured you were seeking suggestions on how to make your article more ... precise.
One more for you, Shincha means literally new harvest, not first flush (though the celebration of shincha goes beyond this). Ichibancha means first flush. So while not all ichibancha is shincha, all shincha is ichibancha. Much ichiban is stored away as aracha and when it is pulled from storage, it is no longer considered shincha for various reasons, but is simply ichiban. While I am sure you understand the subtle differences, your readers seeking information likely will not when it comes to these subtle nuances.